Amanda has arrived.
Riceman has arrived.
Riceman says, "hiya"
Amanda Says "Sorry, I was having a little problem. :("
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Amanda says "Hiya!"
Riceman asks, "No prob... so tell me, where are you now, physically?"
Amanda says "I am here in the library and in "workshop S3"!!!!"
:)
Riceman smiles.
Amanda asks "And you?"
Riceman says, "I'm in an office in RB"
Amanda says "Great!"
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Interesting way he
says that...hmm... |
Riceman asks, "How do you like
MOOin'?" |
Made me laugh...haha... |
Amanda says "It's pretty cool-although I don't usually
get on it too much. As you can see by my lack of knowledge with the commands!"
Riceman exclaims, "Oh, you're doing great!"
Amanda Says "As you can see by the lack of knowledge with the commands!"
Riceman builds a chair and sits down
Amanda asks "Did you go ahead and read over my paper?"
Riceman exclaims, "I did. About Miss Virginia!"
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true, very true!! |
Amanda says "Awesome-was it
(quoted from Joel: "Nifty?") "
Amanda smiles! :)
Riceman smiles at Amanda-- indeed, "Nifty."
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nice touch I thought... |
Riceman asks, "Did you like writing it?"
Amanda asks "Where should we begin?"
Riceman says, "Tell me about the community you write about in your
paper..."
Amanda says, "Yes, however it did take me awhile to get started."
Amanda says, "Because I wasn't sure how to start it."
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Yes, I did! |
Riceman says, "Getting started
is sometimes really tough-"
Amanda says, "The community is the whole
Fort Wayne community and surrounding areas."
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true, indeed true! |
Riceman asks, "Did you grow
up in Fort Wayne?" |
Yes, I did! |
Amanda asks "Is your screen
cutting off part of my sentences?"
Riceman says, "naw, coming through fine"
Amanda asks "Do I need to push return after
each sentence?"
Amanda says "Okay great!"
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(My screen wasn't on
wrap around or whatever, so I couldn't read what he was writing.) |
Riceman says, "Noppers..."
Amanda says "Yes, I did grow up in Fort Fun!"
Riceman says, "So you know quite a bit about
Fort Wayne then"
Amanda says, "Yes, to some extent."
Riceman smiles at "Fort Fun!"
Riceman asks, "How did you hear about Virginia
Stantz?"
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interesting word!.... |
Amanda says, "I haven't really
added anything about the 'community' to my paper yet. I
didn't get that far yet."
Riceman says, "Seems to be that you're getting
to it-- you have great examples and now just need some overall conclusions"
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yes, I was getting
to that part but ran out of time...(spare time) |
Amanda says, "My parents have
told me about her, church events have said her name and what she does,
other organizations know about her and then in turn tell me and others.
So basically through the media and word of mouth. " |
nice
phrase I thought...Go Amanda! |
Riceman says, "Cool. So you
have a strong knowledge-base about her... I saw that in your paper"
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yes, pretty much w/help
from the biography |
Amanda says "I have this biography
of her from the paper which gave me a
lot of these quotes. So that is where I get the majority of them."
Riceman says, "Tell me about your introduction
Amanda, how you setup "community" in terms of people helping
people"
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nice resource I thought... |
Amanda says "okay, Riceman I
have a slight problem, your sentences are getting cut off from me."
Riceman says, "I'll keep 'em short, thanks-"
Amanda says "Well I just kindof 'threw' it
together if you will."
Riceman smiles.
Riceman says, "Do
you think it's important to say"
Amanda says "Honestly, I really didn't know
what to put in the intro."
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this is where I told
him I couldn't read sentences (no wrap around.) |
Riceman asks, "where
she's at (Fort Wayne)?"
Riceman says, "I think it's really good--leads
into Virginia Strantz well"
Amanda says "Sure that would be cool. "
Riceman says, "I"
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good idea (town/city
where she's :) from.) |
Amanda asks "Do
you think that I should put it after her name or what?"
Riceman says, "As a reader, I got a bit
confused when you said "Through its help and...""
Riceman says, "I think after..."
Amanda says "Should I write: Virginia
Strantz, from Fort Wayne, is one.......?"
Riceman says, "With the "its"
thing though-- its implies a non-gendered person"
Riceman says, "That's a great idea-"
Amanda says "Oh, are you talking about 'it's'
in the sentence above it?"
Riceman says, "yeah"
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I think is a good idea
b/c people need to know where she is from and who "it's" is... |
Amanda says "So
you think that I should use Virginia Strantz and her organization....blah
blah blah......?" |
interesting?! |
Riceman says, "I
think the reader would appreciate the information--"
Amanda says, "Thanks, that is a good idea.
I knew what I was talking about but the reader probably wouldn't really
know. "
Riceman says, "True... and, like the assignment
points out, the payoff is that the"
Riceman says, "research can be engaging when
you get detailed about things"
Riceman says, "that matter to you..."
Amanda says, "Yep, that is so true. Smiles
and says "Thanks!"
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yes, true! |
Riceman says, "I did like some
of the biographical information."
Amanda asks, "Do you think
that I should cite it a different way?"
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I did also! |
Riceman asks, "Which info do
you think is particularly interesting for your reader?"
Riceman says, "What do you mean about citing..."
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Where
from? Who it is? What she does? Something about organization, how she affects
community... |
Riceman says, "I think there
are other ways of integrating quotes--"
Amanda says, "Because I got it out of a paper
that someone else had interviewed her."
Riceman says, "instead
of starting a new sentence with the quote, lead into it"
Riceman says, "Ah..."
Riceman says, "Is there a way, for example,
that you could combine the ideas in the
two"
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See Ball Point book.... |
Riceman asks, "sentences:
"She graduated.... and "'During my time'"?" |
good idea...never thought
of it like that. :) |
Amanda says, "Ahhh...I see your
point very clearly now. :)"
Riceman says, "Oh, with citing something...
you do it right when you say"
Riceman says, ""(News Sentinal 3A)"
Riceman says, "Do include that in the
previous sentence though"
Amanda says "Yes, I will try that."
Amanda asks, "So it is right then?"
Riceman says, "For example: ...Miss Virginia
said (News Sentinel 3A)."
Riceman asks, "Do you see the difference?"
Amanda utters.... "kindof?!"
Riceman asks, "How
would you do the one at the bottom of page-1?"
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Good Ideas! |
Amanda says "For
two years however, she had charge of the Crippled Children's Clinic at
St. Joseph's and "it was during that time that I began to feel uneasy;
as if I should be doing more." (News Sentinel 3A)
Riceman says, "Good job Amanda..."
Amanda says "oops.... and Strantz said "......"
(News Sentinel 3A)??????????
Amanda asks "Which one sounds better?"\
Riceman says, "Just how you wrote it before,
but: ...doing more" (News Sentinel 3A)."
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great! I did it! (He
had a good idea/suggestion when he said that about citing.) |
Riceman says, "The period goes
at the very end, after the (XXX)."
Riceman says, "I like how you've integrated
the two sentences"
Amanda Says "So it should read: "Blah
blah.......more (News Sentinel 3A)."
Riceman exclaims, "You got it!"
Amanda shouts, "Alleluia!"
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I didn't know that.
so that was nice to know. |
Riceman says, "You do mention
some good bibliographic info--"
Riceman smiles.
Riceman says, "I'm curious though..."
Amanda says, "oops...everyone is looking
at me now...hahahaha!"
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awesome! :) |
Riceman asks, "Do you use some
of the information to talk about community?"
Amanda Smiles!
Riceman smirks.
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sure... |
Riceman thinks Joel's enthusiasm
has worn off on Amanda.
Amanda says, "Okay, that is the part that
I haven't gotten to yet. I was running out of time the day that I was working
on it. :]"
Riceman says, "I'm particularly interested
in Strantz's German/French heritage--"
Riceman says, "ah..."
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I was laughing at this
point...funny! |
Amanda says, "Hahaha....I think
so. He is very euthusiastic! His jokes are pretty good!"
Riceman says, "Is there a
way to suggest that, perhaps, some of these traits"
Amanda says, "Umm...okay. Do you think that
I should mention more on that?"
Riceman says, "are characteristic of Virginia's
age..."
Riceman asks, "and then can relate to communities
outside of her age?"
Amanda says, "Because I really don't know
too much on that."
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:) |
Riceman says, "That
is, do you think the Fort Wayne community today can learn from"
Amanda says "Woah, hold up there buddy. You
confused me a little. Let me read what you wrote again."
Riceman asks, "when
she was working in the hospital or St. Catherine's Academy?"
Riceman smiles.
Riceman holding on
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Yes, I think that they
probably could. Very much so. (I was confused at this point, the day I
was on the MOO.) |
Amanda says, "I'm going to say:
'Yes, that they can learn. But I am still confused on what you are trying
to say!"
Riceman says, "Well, methinks I'm getting
at that second half of the assignment, really..."
Amanda says, "I think that I am getting it
a little better here."
Riceman says, "Using
some of the things you talk about in your essay to make general"
Riceman says, "points about community"
Riceman builds another chair for Amanda: "You
must be tired standing
|
I was confused a lot
then but not now! :) |
Amanda sit
Riceman smiles.
Riceman hands Amanda a coke. We're out of Pepsi.
Amanda Says "I don't know how to sit...I
told you before...I am not good at this."
Amanda says "Thanks, I was thirsty also and
very hungry!"
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I don't know command
for "sit" (as you can see). |
Riceman asks, "You're doing
great-- really... do you see the point about community?"
Amanda says, "I think that I see the point
about community."
Riceman says, "Let's look at the top of page-2
for a sec..."
Amanda says again, "But could you one last
time restate what you are trying to say?"
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yes, I see it now! |
Amanda says, "okeedokee!"
Riceman says, "There's
a good example in: "a low-rent housing project...""
Amanda laughs!
Amanda says "Okay, I read it..."
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nice word! |
Riceman wonders if everyone around
Amanda thinks she's goofy
Amanda says "Oh, I am sure of it!" :)
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hahaha :) ... |
Riceman asks, "Tell
me, what do low-rent housing projects indicate about a community?"
Riceman asks, "That is, what needs do
they have?"
Amanda says, "That is might say that they
are in need of help and that they are poor and wanting help from someone
in the community!"
Amanda says "Their needs are food, money,
shelter, love, etc...."
Riceman says, "Good point. What
kind of help? You say "some love, a friendship...""
Riceman asks, "ah, food, money, shelter,
etc. How can one tangibly give that>?"
Amanda says, "I guess just someone to love
them and be there for them."
Riceman asks, "What community projects/services
are in Fort Wayne?"
Amanda says "Through donations and help from
the community....are we getting somewhere?"
Amanda says, "Goodwill stores-(I shop there
sometimes, so I know--smiles!), Habitat for Humanity, Soup Kitchens, Miss
Virginia's organization, St. Vincent de Paul society, etc."
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by Miss Virginia helping
them it shows the rest of the community that poor aren't all scummy and
sick, it shows that others should care for them and help them. (she is
a good example.) |
Riceman asks, "Do
you think community can be the creation of these services?"
Amanda says, "there are many, I don't know
all of them."
Riceman says, "Great examples..."
Amanda says, "Why of course!"
Riceman asks, "Amanda, do you think some
of these things could be included in your essay?"
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yes,
it means that the community was concerned and tried to do something about
it. It has helped some. |
Amanda says, "Yes they could
be. But where should I include them--with
the 'low rent housing' part?"
Riceman says, "that's a good idea"
Riceman says, "Or, maybe in the part you
want to add about communities in general"
Riceman says, "I also wanted to mention how
the reader is a bit confused on things like"
|
(services/projects) |
Riceman asks, "everyday clothes--
is it everyday to them or her?"
Amanda says "A bit confused on what?"
(Long sentence-doesn't fit on screen)
Riceman says, "Do
you think it's important to point out that she is recognizing difference"
Riceman asks, "between her daily life
and theirs?"
Amanda says, "It is everyday clothes to "everyone"......"
Riceman says, "ahh...."
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that was confusing
for the reader...oops. (Although, that is what it said in the article...hmm) |
Riceman asks, "Do
you think it's important to include the year in the next paragraph?"
Amanda says, "That would be important."
Riceman says, "You know, where you mention
"they were open 2-3 days after school""
Amanda says, "Yes, and indeed I have the
year!"
Riceman says, "coolness..."
Amanda says "Well okay, maybe I don't...........ugh"
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yes, I included it...what
a good idea... :) |
Riceman says, "I
think it would be interesting for the reader because it would"
Riceman says, "remind them that we're
talking about a different time period"
Riceman says, "although the same good benifits
from both communities can be brought"
Riceman says, "together"
Riceman holding
Riceman says, "By the way, I really liked
the part about the Elmhurst students"
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interesting point... |
Amanda says, "Okay, that is
true. I will have to do some calculations because I have one year and I
am going to have to do some adding to it. It is the year from when she
graduated from St. Joe's Hospital nurse's training."
Amanda says, "I think that I could add on
that. Because I have a whole article about it."
Riceman says, "Cool.... hey, do me a favor"
Riceman says, "Can
you write me out a list of all the things that define "community""
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I found a year. |
Amanda is overwhelmed at all this
'new jazz' she can put into her paper that she didn't even think of. :)
Riceman asks, "in your paper?"
Riceman smiles.
Amanda says, "IN MY PAPER?"
Amanda says, "like where at?"
|
interesting quote I
came up with (Hoping it made "Riceman" laugh.) |
Riceman nods: "things
like shelters, providing food, listening to others"
Riceman says, "Perhaps things that made
Virginia "popular" as you say"
Amanda says, "Okay, perhaps....."
Riceman feels convincing.
Amanda says, "Should I go ahead and list
them in the community part? The end of the paper?"
Riceman says, "type: read project"
Riceman says, "In the next to the last paragraph
it talks about moving from the inside"
Riceman says, "to the outside: moving from
Virginia to overall ideas on community"
Amanda says, "Hmmm....."
Riceman says, "I
think the paper is also looking for how Virginia's efforts effect other"
|
interesting. I was
lost at where should put this stuff in at... |
Riceman says, "communities--"
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yes, indeed it is!
(very good.) |
Riceman finishes coke, burps subtly,
opens another can.
Amanda says, "That is correct. I need to
add that to my paper yet..."
Riceman nudges another can in Amanda's direction.
Amanda says, "Woah....you must be thirsty,
huh? No thanks, one can is enough for me."
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he was Thirsty! haha... |
Riceman says, "Has
writing the paper made you think about the community you live in?>"
Riceman smiles.
Amanda says, "Yes, it has made me realize
that I should be doing more for the community and that others should help
out more and not just shrug it off."
Riceman says, "Wow... that's neat-"
Amanda asks, "How do you think that I should
start about the community part?"
Riceman asks, "What kind of "papers"
are in our culture?"
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Heck yes! We need more
help w/poor... |
Riceman asks,
"That is, do you think movies try to promote the same reflection?"
Amanda ponders.
Riceman envisions Amanda pondering.
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No--good point
he brought up... |
Amanda says, "Pardon
my language but: HELL NO! It does just the opposite!"
Riceman thinks
this is a possible way of "start(ing)...the community part."
|
Woops...Amanda might
of went off the handle.... |
Amanda says, "Awesome----good
connection 'Riceman'!"
Riceman asks, "How so?"
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very good connection! |
Amanda asks, "Where did you
get your name (a little off the subject)?"
Amanda says, "Interesting."
Riceman says, "type: finger riceman"
Amanda says, "Hey, that is pretty slick!"
Riceman asks, "Do you think Freshman Connections
is about community?"
Amanda says, "Yes, I believe so."
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interesting name. |
Amanda says, "I am glad that
i am getting a print out-there is just too much info to keep up with. You
are a good writing tutor-much better than my last one."
Amanda smiles!
Riceman smirks.
Riceman thinks Amanda has all the ideas
|
a lot of info there.
But that is good too. |
Amanda says, "Yes, indeed I
think I do."
Riceman laughs.
Riceman says, "Hey, you bring in some aspects
of religion. Talk to me."
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I wasn't trying to
be conceited. Riceman had all the ideas! :) |
Amanda says, "So you think that
I should add stuff about what kinds of
programs my community has, how Virginia's background effects the community
she helps, use Virginia Strantz and her organization instead of 'it's',
etc...?"
Amanda says, "Oh boy.....here we go...."
Riceman says, "those all sound like great
additions, yes"
Riceman smiles.
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this will take forever
but very good ideas indeed. |
Riceman considers opening a third
can of coke
Riceman looks around for chips, wonders if Amanda
brought any
Amanda says, "yes, I guess that I do indeed
talk about Religion on a very vague note."
Amanda says, "Why of course I did!"
Amanda says, "Man you drink a lot of pop!"
Riceman says, "You have a little about Virginia
being catholic in the second paragraph"
Riceman nods.
Amanda says, "I personally don't care for
pop too much-----uch!"
Riceman says, "and then you share her quote
about "the Holy Spirit""
Amanda says, "Ahh..yes."
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he was drinking a lot...hmm. |
Riceman asks, "Do
you think a community can benifit from different relgions?"
Amanda asks, "Should I elaborate on the Holy
Spirit. Is that what you are saying?"
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I believe yes they
can. That is a good point, I hadn't thought about it. |
Riceman says, "I'm
curious if Virginia's quote manifests itself in other forms besides"
Amanda says, "Umm..sure..."
Riceman says, "the
foundation of religion-"
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hmm...I don't know
about that... |
Riceman says, "Of course, I'm
not saying you *should* write about anything, just bouncin'"
Riceman says, "ideas"
Amanda says, "I think you have another good
point. But I don't see where/if I should put tha in my paper--it seems
kindof like it's off the subject a tad."
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well...okay?! |
Riceman asks, "Do
you think Virginia felt her community efforts were a job or a way of life?"
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a way of life..a very
giving woman. |
Amanda says, "Of course....smiles
and gives an okay sign."
Riceman wonders what kind of chips Amanda has
Amanda Says, "I think that she thought that
it was just the way she was. She was doing it because she was "told"
too..."
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Amanda likes to smile! |
Amanda says, "I have Nacho Cheese
Doritoes!"
Amanda says, "yummy, yummy, those sound good
right now."
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those sound good right
now also...yummy! |
Riceman says, "Really! Because
she was told to. Doritoes are the best. Crunch."
Amanda says, "Yes, she had a gut feeling
to help others out. She thought it was her vocation in life."
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Holy Spirit told her
to do so. |
Riceman says, "So it
did kindof become a way of life then."
Amanda says, "Yes. But a way of life that
she enjoys and loves."
Riceman asks, "Should a community stress
that these things are duties or ways of life?"
Amanda says, "I think that they should
stress that they are a way of life-a way in which everyone should take
part in and do. We need more people out there like her."
|
A way of life to her
and so many. |
Amanda says, "It's not necessarily
a "DUTY", just something that everyone should like to do."
Riceman is wondering if copy and paste from MOO-logs
to papers works.
Riceman agrees, wholeheartedly.
|
I wouldn't call it
a duty, something that is done (way of life.) |
Amanda says, "Why? Am what I
am saying, should it be in the paper?"
Riceman smiles.
Riceman says, "Amanda, I'm curious. Have
you thought of sharing this paper when it's"
Amanda grins widely
Riceman asks, "finished with some community
groups?"
Amanda says, "No, I haden't thought about
it."
Riceman says, "I really do think it could
make a big difference for people who read it"
Amanda says, "But that is a great idea."
Amanda says, "That is what I like to do best,
make a change in our community and world!"
Riceman asks, "Who could you share it with?"
Amanda Says, "I could share it with M.Virginia
herself, a domestic violence shelter, HFH, geez I don't really know for
sure....youth programs..."
Riceman says, "great ideas"
Amanda says, "That is so awesome---I should
do that."
|
This was really awesome
to "hear." I hadn't thought about reading it to people--but maybe
I should. It could change someone's life.. :) That is what I like to do
best. :) |
Riceman applauds Amanda, people
down the hall look at Riceman with wonder |
coolness! (Amanda was
laughing!) |
Riceman says, "In a way, it's
like you are making the difference in your community"
Riceman says, "by sharing your writing about
it"
Amanda smiles and laughs loudly.....people around
her look puzzled looks on their faces!!
Riceman smiles.
|
GREAT! |
Amanda says, "That is absolutely
right...maybe someone could put it in the paper.?!?!"
Riceman bets they're all jealous that you have
doritoes
Riceman exclaims, "Great idea!"
|
that would be smooth... |
Amanda says, "I am being secretive
about it because you aren't SUPPOSE to have food in labs.....oops..."
Riceman smiles.
Amanda says, "Thanks!"
|
dumb humor! |
Riceman asks, "Do you think
conferencing on the MOO is different than in person?"
Amanda asks, "So you think that this paper
isn't too terribly bad then I take it?"
|
yes, seems like you
get more done! |
Riceman says, "It's a fascinating
paper-"
Amanda says, "Yes, in some ways it's better
because now I can go back and see what you 'said' because before I would
forget some of the 'ideas' the tutors had."
Riceman says, "And I think you know areas
that you want to work on."
Amanda says, "So yes, I believe they are
better than the one on one conferences in the WWCenter."
|
GREAT! (Amanda
was blushing..haha) |
Riceman says, "Perhaps you might
want to suggest to Joel that you'd like to listen to"
Riceman says, "the tapes from earlier conferences...."
|
good idea...(but I'm
on break now..so it wouldn't work for this project.) |
Amanda says, "Of course, I will
ask him on Wednesday where I need to list them." |
oops...forgot about
that! |
Riceman says, "Do you think
you *think* about your writing more because to communicate"
Amanda says, "Oops, I got half of your sentence
and thought you said something else."
Riceman says, "Do you think you *("
Amanda Says, "Good idea about the tapes."
|
this confused me a
little. A weird sentence! |
Riceman asks, "Do you think
you *think*( more about writing in the MOO?"
Amanda agrees (yes).
Riceman says, "That is, you are writing in
the MOO about writing instead of talking"
Riceman says, "about writing..."
|
yes, definately! |
Riceman says, "I think that's
really interesting"
Amanda says, "I think it is better. :)
|
I think its very interesting
also! :) |
Riceman says, "Maybe when I
go to Fort Wayne some day I'll see your essay posted..."
Amanda says, "Well this was very fun and
interesting--much more exciting then the last conference."
Amanda smiles and says "I hope so!"
Riceman smiles.
|
hopefully! |
Riceman says, "Thanks for your
time Amanda- your writing is very sincere and wholehearted"
Amanda hands Rich a handful of chips for his good
deed for the day.
Riceman munches, while smiling
Amanda says, "Thank you --it comes from the
heart!"
|
Amanda
blushes again! :) |
Riceman asks, "The Chips?"
Riceman smiles.
Amanda says, "So long and have a good day, Rich!"
Riceman says, "you 2 Amanda..."
Riceman waves.
Amanda waves bye and exits!
Amanda has disconnected.
The housekeeper arrives to remove Amanda.
Riceman goes out.
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haha--funny
humor! :) |
|
I personally thought
this "conference" was more worth while. We talked about my writing
a lot unlike the conference at the WC. (I didn't get much out of that,
but this...I really did.) Rich was an excellent writing tutor! He's
funny too! I really enjoyed this one better. :) |